Unit 11: Feedback and Feedforward Sheets

LO5: Reflection On Feedback

After our meeting with Vicky Kilby, as a team we must improve upon: 

• The segments could have included more information on the games releases mentioned
• More research needs to be done on local gaming events, developments and tech

These two improvements will be written in more detail in order to make the script longer and less vague.

As a team, we were successful in:

• Equally distributing dialogue between both presenters
• The script follows the the correct genre of the show
• The language and formed used in the script will be understood by the target audience
• The tone of the script was good and upbeat

By acting on our feedback, we intend to improve on the above points.

We will do this by researching the games releases we mention in the original script and including more information about each game in terms of gameplay, technological advances, development from previous sequels and platform adjustments.  

We will also research local gaming events, developments and companies in order to make our script more suited for a local audience.  This will also represent the interest in gaming in Sheffield and surrounding areas.

By making these changes, we hope that our script will be perfect for the news section of The Games Corner which will be broadcast on Sheffield Live! Television.

We have devised some questions to help us think about the feedback we have been given.

1. Have needs/expectations been met for the client brief and target audience?

For this unit, we were asked to create a 5 minute TV News Broadcast  script which would actually be broadcast on Sheffield Live! TV. The show that the script was for is called The Games Corner.  The target audience for this programme are avid gamers and people interested in the latest gaming news. The Games Corner has a NRS social grade of C1, D & E which means viewers have very little disposable income and quite a few families are on benefits.   This is due to SLTV only being available for the people of Sheffield and Sheffield is known as being a deprived area. Our script relates to the target audience as we speak about affordable mainstream games and have very down to earth presenters which can connect with the audience.  As Sheffield Live! are a community brand, they must remit aspects of this which include making content suitable for a diverse audience.

2. What were the clients likes and dislikes?

Vicky from The Games Corner said that she really liked the content of the script although she feels that it was slightly short and some of the topics could have been in more depth.  She also liked our form and style and commented on our speaking distribution saying that it was fair and evenly shared out.  The only thing she disliked about our script was the fact it was more international than local.  Therefore our next steps will be to research local gaming events and conventions and include them in our script to make it more appealing to a local audience.  This is important because Vicky is the founder and presenter of The Games Corner so it is essential that she likes everything about the script.  It is also important to get the script perfect as it is going out on live television therefore it cannot look or sound amateur.  

3. What are the relevant changes that need to be made to the script?

Relevant changes that need to be made to our TV News Broadcast script are making it more local and elaborating on our current script.  For example, we will talk more in-depth about the gameplay of the new releases and how these releases differ to previous sequels.   We will also add more camera directions to our script in order to make it more descriptive.  We are going to make these changes because it will help our script look more professional and be to a higher standard for television.  These changes will also help us connect to our target audience better as the content will be more local.  

4. Is the content of the product correct?

Based on the content and layout, our script meets the conventions of a TV News Broadcast script as it includes dialogue, locations, camera work and sound.  When gaining feedback, Vicky from SLTV commented on how well our script followed these conventions and complimented us on how well we had presented the script.  The language of our script was informal. This is because our target audience are teenagers therefore informal relaxed news can connect with them more.  Although the language was informal, the information was still extremely informative and followed conventions of a news broadcast, giving the latest news from the gaming world.  This informal language is different to the language that BBC News use as our script has a specific target audience and genre.  The house style used in our script follows the conventions of a TV News Broadcast script as it was written in the font Courier and is size 12.  This is the generic font and size used for scripts as it is extremely clear and readable.   Camera directions are also included in our script in order to make it a shooting script.  This means that both the presenters and camera team can use the same script.  Our script also follows the typical conventions of a script with the location, GFX and SFX on the right hand side, the dialogue in the centre and the camera actions on the left hand side.  The mode of address for our script is both peer to peer and teacher to pupil.  This is because peer to peer means that the presenters connect well with the target audience however they still inform the viewer meaning that it also includes aspects of teacher to pupil as the audience member will be learning about the current gaming news.  Although there are aspects of teacher to pupil, the language is still informal yet informative in order to follow the conventions of a TV News Broadcast script and relate to the target audience.  

5.  Does it meet legal and ethical requirements?

According to Ofcom Broadcasting codes, our script adheres with this as it has appropriate content for children under 18 years old.  This is because the show will be broadcast mid day therefore it must be pre- watershed.  This means that it will not include any offensive language, sexual, drug or violent references.  Our script is free of any of these making it appropriate and follows the Ofcom code. An example of this is we have not spoken about any games that are PEGI 18 or have strong graphical violent images. We have considered ethical issues such as discrimination and appropriate language. This is because we can not produce anything offensive towards the viewers,topics including religion or gender or sexuality.  As we are making a gaming news script, these issues will not be present making it appealing for our target audience and abide by Ofcom Broadcasting codes.

We are not biased in our script as the presenters do not talk about their opinions of the games, just about the releases and stick to facts.  This is because if one of the presenters said that they did not like the game, this could influence peoples' decisions to purchase the game and/or offend the production company.   However, we are able to promote local gaming events and conventions as this is free publicity and the purpose of the show is to showcase the local gaming talent.   Sheffield Live! advertise local events for the community. We would gain copyright for any music and graphics found by requesting for permission to use them and crediting them in the show.  We must gain permission to use any sound or images as it will be going out live on TV and could result in being sued. We will ensure that information being broadcast is not libel as this means 'false information'. We will do this by using trusted sources for information and official websites.  It is important to reference our sources in order to back up our information to prove that it is not false. An example of a source we have used is the official Game Republic as it is all true information.

LO4: Final Script

LO4: Improved Script

All of the highlighted sections are where we have taken on board Vicky's comments and made changes to our script. These include additional information on the front page such as the set design, location, air time and presenters. On the following pages, the highlighted areas are indicating additional dialogue to include more information on subjects such as the event or game specifically; this is due to the feedback from Vicky. 

LO4: Updated Research Notes

EGX 2015 information available at https://www.egx.net/egx sourced on 16/03/15
MCSG Asia information available at    http://mgscsummit.com/welcome/ sourced on 17/03/15
ENADA information available at http://en.enadaprimavera.it/ sourced on 17/03/15
March 2015 releases by Playstationlifestyle available at - http://www.playstationlifestyle.net/march-2015-ps4-ps3-ps-vita-new-release-video-games/ sourced on 18/03/15

Information about Battlefield: Hardline sourced at http://www.game.co.uk/webapp/wcs/stores/servlet/HubArticleView?hubId=299790&articleId=299791&catalogId=10201&langId=44&storeId=10151&merchname=comingsoon-_-seemore-_-Bfhardline on the 20/03/15



List of game releases in March available at  http://www.playstationlifestyle.net/march-2015-ps4-ps3-ps-vita-new-release-video-games/
Sourced on 23/03/15

Spongebob HeroPants game information available athttp://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/SpongeBob_HeroPants and http://www.metacritic.com/game/xbox-360/spongebob-heropants both sourced on 23/03/15 

Slender Man The Arrival game information available athttp://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Slender:_The_Arrival Sourced on the 23/03/15

Information for the Gaming Republic Networking event is available athttp://gamerepublic.net Sourced on 23/03/15

LO4: Meeting Minutes

Meeting 2 – 20/05/15

Agenda

1.     Apologies

2.     Roles in the Team

3.     Agenda items – Initial Ideas/allocating roles/Script Writing/Research

4.     Deadlines

5.     AOB

Distribution: The Games Corner

Minutes

Agenda Item	Discussion	Action	Time Frame
1. Do you think that our script follows the correct genre of The Games Corner? Why?	Vicky agreed that our script follows the correct genre and has good coverage such as Gaming Expo’s and releases	None Needed	N/A
2. When researching our week, it seemed to be very slow for news - Do you think that this shows or is there enough content for a substantial news section?	Vicky told us that she thinks that the brevity of the script does show however in order to improve this, we could research more local events and talk about local companies.	Sophie is going to research games releases in more detail to current games mentioned in order to give more information.  Molly will type the research up to amend the script to act on Vicky’s feedback. Annabel will find footage and gain copyright permission to use in between the news section.	23/05/15
3. Do you think that the dialogue is shared between you and Jordan well or is it too one sided?	Vicky thinks that the dialogue is evenly shared between both presenters.	None Needed	N/A
4.  Does the language and form used in the script make it understandable for your target audience? Why?	Vicky told us that she thinks the language and form used are appropriate and other audiences would understand the language and form too.	None Needed	N/A
5.  What would you change about our script?	Overall, Vicky said that the script is too short and doesn’t really cover much about what we are telling the viewers.	As a team, we will do the above actions in order to make the script longer and include more detail about games releases as well as add detail about local gaming conventions.	24/05/14

LO4: Production Schedule

LO4: The Games Corner Script Feedback Evidence

Today we have spoken to Vicky Kilby from Sheffield Live! who is one of the presenters from The Games Corner.  We asked her 5 questions about our script which we could then reflect upon and make amendments to our script.

The 5 questions were...

1. Do you think that our script follows the correct genre of The Games Corner? Why?

2. When researching our week, it seemed to be very slow for news - Do you think that this shows or is there enough content for a substantial news section?

3. Do you think that the dialogue is shared between you and Jordan well or is it too one sided?

4.  Does the language and form used in the script make it understandable for your target audience? Why?

5.  What would you change about our script?


Here is the evidence of our feedback meeting 

LO3: Script Draft

LO3: Research Notes

EGX 2015 information available at https://www.egx.net/egx sourced on 16/03/15
MCSG Asia information available at    http://mgscsummit.com/welcome/ sourced on 17/03/15
ENADA information available at   http://en.enadaprimavera.it/ sourced on 17/03/15
March 2015 releases by Playstationlifestyle available at - http://www.playstationlifestyle.net/march-2015-ps4-ps3-ps-vita-new-release-video-games/ sourced on 18/03/15

LO3: Production Schedule

LO2: Production Schedule

LO2: Moodboard and Audience Profile

Moodboard

This moodboard was created using different games which are spoken about on the Games Corner.

The Games Corner has a NRS social grade of C1, D & E which means viewers have very little disposable income and quite a few families are on benefits.   This is due to SLTV only being available for the people of Sheffield and Sheffield is known as being a deprived area.

Audience Profile

Hey, I'm Josh and I'm 15 and from Sheffield.  I'm currently studying my GCSEs at Chaucer School.  My favourite subject at school is art and I'm predicted to get an A in it! I really enjoy writing too because it lets my creativity flow.   But my main interest is gaming.  I'm not ashamed to admit I am one of the biggest gaming geeks going.  My favourite game is the Halo trilogy which I started playing on Xbox 360 but now I have an Xbox One and the graphics on it are just amazing.   I love the surreal escapism of the gaming, it takes me to a different place.  My gaming obsession started when I was around 10 and I was introduced to Minecraft by my older brother.  I literally didn't see day light for weeks on end when I first discovered Minecraft.   I love everything about it, the missions and wars as well as the social side.  I now have my own clan and we've all added each other on Xbox Live and play other games against each other.  I get an allowance from my mum and dad weekly which I save to buy new games.  My next purchase will be the new Star Wars game which is getting released before the new film!!  In order to help me decide which games to buy, I enjoy watching YouTube reviews.  My personal favourite reviewer is Arsonall and he reviews all of the adventure sci-fi games which are right up my street.  I have recently found out that Sheffield Live TV! are launching a gaming show called Games Corner which I will definitely be watching religiously.  I love hearing to people's opinions of games and seeing what they rate them.  I also want to go to a gaming convention in the summer such as Play Expo and I've heard that the guys at Games Corner have an episode based all around it so I'll be watching and seeing how good they thought it was!  Also, the new section that they have will inform me of any upcoming gaming nights and events which I'm really interested in attending.

LO2: Meeting Minutes

LO2: Ideas Mind Map

LO2: My Team

I will be working with Sophie, Jake and Annabel to produce our script for The Games Corner.  The deadline for our script is Friday 20th March 2015, this means that we are week 3.

My role will be Script Writer and I will be working with Sophie.  In order to undertake this role, It is essential that we understand the conventions of a TV News Broadcast script.

Jake and Annabel's role will be Researchers.   They will look online to see what has been happening during the week and what is to come.   

We will work together by appropriately wording the research found.

LO1: Production Schedule

LO1: Analysing Different Scripts

Style and Content

The most common house style (font and size) for scripts is Courier and size 12.  This is because the font is very visible for people of all ages and abilities to see. 

Screenplays have character descriptions to ensure that it is obvious what the character is doing therefore this tells the actor how they should play that part.

A computer game script also includes a flow chart because the game has various outcomes depending on what options the player uses.

Presenters and character sections will be set out on screenplays centrally and in capital letters during the synopsis write up.  In Broadcast scripts the presenter names are also in capitals although they are not necessarily centralised, they are set out left justified.

Video games will feature a synopsis to make it clear what the aim of the game is.

Various scripts such as screenplays, TV scripts and theatre scripts have stage and location directions.  This is to make it clear to the actors how they are meant to appear throughout their role and the location tells them how they are meant to act to adapt to the conditions.

Sounds effects will have their own section on a script.  They will be named SFX which is script language for sound effects.

Mode of address means how somebody is spoken to. There are 3 types of modes of address. These are peer2peer.  This means how you would talk to your friends which is informal.  Teacher2pupil which is usually a mixture between formal and informal.  Formal when teaching and explaining but informal when speaking.  There is also parent2child which is both formal and informal but also informative.  The mode of address depends on the genre of show, for example, a TV drama will be hard-hitting therefore it will be formal whereas a TV sketch will be light-hearted and informal.

The common narrative structures in screenplays has titles, a synopsis, location (INT. EXT.), has character names capitalised and in bold, has intonation in brackets under character name, it contains editing transitions such as cut to and fade in and out. 


Narrative Structure

There are 4 different types of narrative structure in script writing.  

1. Single stranded
This means that the story only follows one character.  For example, in a video game, you play as one character within a story.  Another example is the film Superman.  Although there is other characters, the story follows one particular person.

2. Multi-stranded
This means that the story follows more than one character.  An example of this is anything drama based such as soaps like Eastenders.  The programme is filmed in different locations following different characters and story lines.  

2. Linear
This means that the story is in chronological order.  An example of this is a video game. The game will start with a synopsis video which informs the player of the aim of the game.

3. Non-linear
This means that the order of the story isn't in any order yet still makes sense.  Examples of this are films such as Shutter Island which starts from the middle and works its way throughout the past and present.


Genre

TV Drama scripts tend to be fiction whereas documentaries are non-fiction. 
Video games are a made up story meaning they are fiction.
Screenplays are usually fiction although sometimes they can be based on real life events and people which then makes them non-fiction.
TV News broadcasts are always non-fiction as they are informing an audience.
 Interview scripts usually use probing questions which are non-fiction although they can sometimes be rumours which are made up making them fiction.

Target Audience
The target audience for TV drama scripts is middle-aged women usually mothers who enjoy the voyeuristic values of drama.  They are usually of ABC1 demographics meaning they have a fair bit of disposable income. The age of TV drama scripts varies depending on watershed times.  If the drama is broadcast at 9pm or later, it is intended for a more mature audience.
The target audience for video games are usually teenage boys who enjoy the escapism of being in a virtual world.  Although they don't earn money themselves, they are dependent on their parents who are usually of ABC1 demographics meaning they have disposable income to spend on games.  Games are given a PEGI rating which tells us what age the specific game is intended for.  These ratings are 3+ 7+ 12A 12+ 15+ and 18+.
The target audience for screenplays vary throughout the genres. For example horror films will have a high teenage audience whereas cartoons will have a young audience and parent audience.  Films are given an age rating which indicates what age the audience has to be. The options are PG, 12A, 15 and 18.
The target audience for TV news broadcasts is also very varied as anyone is permitted to watch the news although adults are usually more interested.



As I am creating a TV News Broadcast, here is a more in-depth analysis.


The style and content of a TV News Broadcast is written in a formal manner as they are story telling serious non-fiction headlines. 
Although scripts follow a narrative structure, TV News Broadcast is different. It follows a running order within the studio with a presenter. However each story tells the audience what, when, where, why and how things have happened, informing them on the news.

The genre of TV News Broadcast is non-fiction as real things are being reported.

The target audience for TV news broadcasts is also very varied as anyone is permitted to watch the news although adults are usually more interested. The news is on throughout various times of the day such as 8am, 6pm and 10pm.  This is to keep the audience up to date with the latest news.

Different abbreviations are used on TV News Broadcast scripts. These are...

 N.I – No video support is shown and is read by the anchor/host (30 seconds long).

SILENT - presenters voice is linked to the visuals and is the only sound played.

NATSOT – presenters voice is linked to visuals and visuals have natural sound.

SOT – sound that is on a tape for example a voice over.

V.O – a voice over; presenter narrating visuals.

EXT. - exterior, outside

INT. - interior - inside